Writing Challenge #4

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WEEKLY CHALLENGE #4

  1. WRITE: It’s the TWO SENTENCE challenge! You have three choices…
    1. Romance: Using only two sentences, write a complete love scene that makes us swoon.
    2. Humour: Using only two sentences, make us laugh.
    3. Horror: Using only two sentences, scare us silly!

Choose only one from the three choices above.  The idea is to write a complete scene using just two sentences that either scares us, makes us laugh or gets the romantic side of us lit up.  So are you up for the challenge? Of course you are!

  1. COMMENT: You MUST comment on FOUR other entries to qualify. If you do not, your entry will be disqualified from the challenge. Give and take… Keep the cycle going.
  2. ***IMPORTANT*** In order to qualify, you MUST vote for your TOP TWO choices. If you don’t vote, you cannot win this challenge (even if you receive the most votes!). To vote, you need to reply to the email that goes out for the Weekly Challenges. In that email, if you scroll to the bottom, you will see all the information you need to vote for this challenge.You must join our mailing list in order to receive the weekly voting email. 
  3. DEADLINE: Tuesday, April 19th at 11:59 p.m. PST. Voting booth will open for this challenge on Wednesday, April 20th, and the winners will be announced the following Wednesday, April 27th.
  4. CONGRATULATIONS: To the winners of Challenge #2… Tim Hillebrant, Craig Lincoln and Ellen Best!

THIS CHALLENGE IS OPEN TO ALL MEMBERS!

Have fun!


Author Notes

347 Comments for “Writing Challenge #4”

Jay Heltzer

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The seats I paid top dollar for were fit for royalty. However, I couldn’t understand the shocked looks on the faces of the cast when I took the stage to give them the directions they obviously needed.

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Thought I’d try romance since y’all seem to be full of horror this week.

Sara closed her eyes, trembling and yearning for his touch. Feather light fingers trailed over her breast as his lips found her most private places.

Kiersten Beaster

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As I push myself to my feet with my undamaged arm I can feel the silence encroaching around me like a suffocating cloak. As I turn around it is standing before me, its gnarled, clawed hand shoots out and grabs me tightly by the throat; I cannot scream and I cannot run as the whisper of my last breath escapes my parted lips.

Raymond Tobaygo

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Good morning, Kiersten

The image of impending horror of one’s demise is spot on. Well done!

Take carer and stay safe,

Ray

Tim Hillebrant

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The child stared at the cold, dead eyes of the titanic python coiled in front of him, it’s grin slowly widening to reveal rows upon rows of wickedly sharp teeth. He tried to scream as it slowly worked its mouth over his head, eating the child alive, while he was powerless to make a sound.

Kiersten Beaster

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I could only imagine the fear of being eaten alive by a snake especially through the eyes of a child who is innocent to this type of fear.

Raymond Tobaygo

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Good morning, Tim

Great image! I owned many big constrictors (boa and pythons) and to watching them kill and eat rats…well I can only imagine what it would be like with a human. Well done!

Take care and stays safe,

Ray

Jay Heltzer

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I was screaming at my screen for the kid to get the hell out of there. Guess he was too scared to hear me. 😉

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You have a gruesome imagination Tim horror is the word here. This is not a nit really just an opinion but i thought Gigantic was more in-keeping than Titanic…

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omg… I hate, hate, HATE snakes! This is horrifying, and the description of the mouth of the snake opening up and displaying the teeth getting ready to swallow the kid, excellent vision of terror. Great job, Tim!

Write On!
Becky

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Lucy trembled as Ricky’s fingers moved down the small of her back–not quite touching, but her skin reacting in electric anticipation. She kissed him deeply.

Raymond Tobaygo

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Good morning, Doug

Ah anticipation, anticipation anticipation…..well done.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

Jay Heltzer

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Not to take away from the genuine romantic sentiment of your entry this week, but I was distracted wondering when Fred and Ethel would be stopping by.

Stephanie Walker

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Then, the horrid reality punctured her mind as she used the very last of her energy to feebly attempt to claw her way out of the box. This damp, muffled, darkness was going to be her only, apathetic companion on the brief journey to her demise.

Raymond Tobaygo

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Good morning, Stephanie

You’ve touched on one of the feared forms of death…to be buried alive…well done!

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

Tim Hillebrant

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Hey Stephanie!

Yeah, I’ve been in enough close calls that reading this gives me some shivers. Nicely done way of making a guy’s blood pressure go up- just from reading.

Tim

Kiersten Beaster

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As a claustrophobic person being buried alive would be terrifying. I don’t know that the lack of oxygen would kill me as fast as my fear of being trapped in a small space would!

Jay Heltzer

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I loved the use of the word apathetic to describe the box, as if it had a personality but now it just sat there, uninterested or invested in whether she lives or dies. Brilliant!

charles stone

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“Now, it’s just me and my babies, my heart doesn’t have room for anyone else.”
She smiles. “You invite me into your home, share your food and trust me around your children; you have room for one more.”

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Way to push past all the bullshit and just say it like it is! A man like that, who says the truth in his heart, is worth a looking over, Charles… Well Done!

Write On!
Becky

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From ‘Mercy’ book 2

The Ferris Wheel began to elevate higher and higher from ground level, and Demetrius closed his eyes tightly, anticipating the end like the first time his Dad took him to the dentist. The screams he heard of people on other passenger gondolas only made matters worse, his teeth chattering like he was in an igloo in Antarctica.

Anisa Claire

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Sounds about right! I wouldn’t go on one… Nope! Not ever. Lol. I don’t like being that high off the ground. Nice one, M.L.!

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Thanks, Anisa. Lol. 😛 It actually wasn’t his idea. Jessica made him go on the Ferris Wheel with her before they left. It was the only ride he got on their whole time at the county fair.

Travis Baribeau

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I love the ferris wheel! If I remember, the first time scared the crap out of me. This definitely brought up some old memories 🙂

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Glad to spark nostalgia, Travis. 🙂 I remember I ride my sister and I got on. It was something like “The Octopus” but called something else and went really fast. We both screamed and I was so ready to get off, but at the same time it was hilarious and fun.

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For me this is horror, I cant do heights or closed underground spaces so the Ferris wheel and the igloo wouldn’t be for me, and we wont talk about the dentist. A horrifying horror.

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This guy is really terrified of Ferris Wheels and heights! I know it is a horrible feeling to those who have a fear of heights. You described this well!

Write On!
Becky

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John cracked open his eyelids to find his neighbor Marsha’s face inches from his own, moonlight glinting off her fangs. His last thought before he died was finding it strange that she was drooling.

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So, is this Romance or Horror???? Lovin’ it! Num Num.

Tim Hillebrant

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Nice Dave! Marsha’s quite the beastie, isn’t she? Guess that’ll teach the guy for messing around with her. Well done!

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His gentle hands cradled my swollen face as his thumbs wiped away the tears falling from my eyes. His military bag dropped from his shoulder, and the crowded airport faded away as he whispered, “I’m home, sweetheart.”

Stephanie Walker

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I thought of trying to go the romance route with this challenge but did not know how I could capture the intensity of love in two sentences. I believe you accomplished that goal with your own story. The pain of missing him mixed with the joy of reuniting and his caring touch to sooth her. Very nice.

Tim Hillebrant

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You know, Becky, I think this scene has been played out in airports, bus stops, and rail stations world wide. Love the way you took this and made it sing to the heart.

Tim

Travis Baribeau

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I heard the yell again from downstairs, telling me, “Get out of the house now!” I froze in fear, as it was my voice I was hearing.

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The last line totally floored me, with it being his own voice he was hearing. Conjures up all kinds of wonderings… Really nice, Travis! So good to see you posting here, again. 🙂

Write On!
Becky

Travis Baribeau

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Thanks, Becky. Been way too damn long since I’ve been around. That’s for sure. Appreciate the kind words 🙂

Anisa Claire

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O.O Now that is scary, for sure. Lol. I wouldn’t want to have that happen to me.

Travis Baribeau

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I know, right?!? Not sure what I would actually do in that situation… I would imagine a formation of urine would be involved.

Stephanie Walker

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Eek! The presence of a stranger would be disturbing enough in this situation let alone the presence of a “What the F**K?” Creepy for sure! I like it. 🙂

Raymond Tobaygo

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Good morning, Travis

The confusion regarding the distinct possibility that you have a doppelganger is intriguing and somewhat scary. Well done!

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

Tim Hillebrant

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Nicely done, Travis! Though now I want to know why you’re hearing your voice, and what the emergency is. You’re expanding this, right?

Carol Moore

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The huge man woke up tied to a tree naked in the middle of the woods in the dark.
She stood in front of him swinging a baseball bat and laughing.

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Carol, for some reason this sounds familiar. Didn’t you have another story about a naked person being tortured? If so, I’m impressed. Embrace the dark side, Carol! We have so much more fun here (and cookies)!

Seriously, though. Nice write! I’m definitely scared for that dude.

Stephanie Walker

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Oh how this brought to mind the many times I imagined exacting revenge on someone who had done me wrong! It’s fun to fantasize about revenge since I guess actually doing it is slightly frowned upon. lol This is great!

Raymond Tobaygo

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Good morning, Carol

Nothing like being naked and helpless as you stare death in the face. Enjoyed!

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

Tim Hillebrant

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Yeah, that’s not the kind of baseball I’d like to play. Sounds like this guy is in for a world of hurt. Go Carol!

Raymond Tobaygo

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Raymond Tobaygo

Weekly Challenge 4

I found myself staring into the face of an old man, skin withered and gray, his eyes monetarily captivating me, looking like polished amber gems, sunk into its own mound of puss-filled, inflamed flesh. He opened his mouth, his long-scaled tongue licking the long, jagged teeth that pressed against thick fetid lips.

Anisa Claire

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You have a way with words, my friend! And a knack for creating scary sci-fi characters! Lol. Nice seeing you around again, Ray.

Raymond Tobaygo

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Good afternoon, Anisa

Thank you and it is great to be able to do a challenge.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

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Please keep him out of my head, Spiders kept me up last night… i need to sleep. .. It’s not going to work you scared me now! Raymond you horror nicely well done.

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Ugly. Ugly. Ugly…. So many shivers running down my spine! Great descriptive sentences, Ray. One question: Did you mean momentarily or monetarily?

Write On!
Becky

Raymond Tobaygo

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Good morning, Becky

Thank you for the input as it is always appreciated. I did mean momentarily…thanks for catching it.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

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Ray, sick and disgusting Good job! It reminds me of having to kiss my grandmother in the nursing home.

Raymond Tobaygo

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Good morning, Dave

I really appreciate your input and I have to agree somewhat regarding the nursing home comparison…my father’s in one.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

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As I delivered my presentation something felt wrong, my colour heightened, beads of sweat dripped from my brow, I kicked off my shoe and removed the holdups stocking that had puddled at my ankle. A titter went around the hall as the CEO looked down at the spiked Loubouton sitting in his lap.

Raymond Tobaygo

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Good afternoon, Ellen

I have the distinct image of the shoe flying into his lap. Well done.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

Lisa Doesburg

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Haha! There goes that presentation! It reminds me of the time I went fishing and cast my line. It totally missed the water and hooked off a man’s fishing hat…talk about embarrassed! Great job, very funny!

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Ellen,

I can’t tell you how many times that’s happened to me… it’s humiliating. But nothing a little bit of vodka can’t take care of later in in the day. Nice write!

Stephanie Walker

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That’s a spendy shoe to be kicking around! This is great! I feel like this could be considered humorous and horror…I remember having to give speeches and it was a nightmare. Too funny!

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Oh dear. At least it was a Louboutin! Would be worse if it was a Payless special.

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The make of the shoe was to try and show how important her presentation was to her, she needed to be perfectly poised, dressed, and prepared. And a Walmart shoe may have looked good but wouldn’t have hammered home the importance. Thanks for reading Nancy, nice to see you in the carnival, and nice reading your work again. ???

Anisa Claire

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Chestnut hair framed Cherry’s pale cheeks, accentuating her icy blue eyes as she adjusted her stance. Shifting her victim’s bloodied skin, she folded the loose flap under her chin, and smiled to herself in the mirror… it was a perfect fit.

Raymond Tobaygo

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Good afternoon, Anisa

A little bit Hannibal Lector and the skin-wearing freak from the Texas Chainsaw Massacre.

Enjoyed!

take care and stay safe,

Ray

PS: Congratulations and kudos on landing in the 101 best site.

Anisa Claire

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Thanks, Ray! Glad to see you back around these parts. And thanks! Hitting the WD 101 was a huge moment for WC. But not something that could have happened without the community members 🙂

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Gruesome!!! Loved this rhyming line: “Shifting her victim’s bloodied skin, she folded the loose flap under her chin…” That was a terrifying vision. Nice work. 🙂

Write On!
Becky

Anisa Claire

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Thanks, Becky! These kinds of stories always creep me out the most, so I figured I’d try my own version of it. Lol

Stephanie Walker

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Creeptastic! Definitely could see this in my mind…and Cherry is one disturbed little cookie! lol Awesome, Anisa!

Tim Hillebrant

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Reminds me of either a female Hannibal Lecter, or Leatherface. Was she using a chainsaw by chance? Horrifying, and a little sickening. Very well done!!

Tim

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The Id

I closed my eyes and held my breath for just a moment and then exhaled slowly to steady my nerves before turning the corner. A hideous death would be upon me whether I stayed hidden or faced it head on, for it could smell the fear in me and would feed off of it until I withered and died.

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You paint us a hideous picture of the inevitable. Death, lurking around the corner. This feels supernatural to me… I, too, would like to know what “It” is. Nice work. 🙂

Write On!
Becky

Lisa Doesburg

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Darling you’ve come back to me!” Catherine gushed, her eyes shimmering with joyful tears.

Her husband, bits of earth still clinging to his pale, decomposing face, held out his arms to enfold her in his cold embrace.

Raymond Tobaygo

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Good afternoon, Lisa

Even to the undead, love still matters. Enjoyed the post.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

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I got visions of Pet Cemetery, too. This would be a horrible nightmare! To see a loved one so twisted and deformed. It’s bad enough knowing they died, but then to have to see and live through this! Thanks for the nightmares, Lisa. 🙂

Write On!
Becky

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Stirring myself awake,I felt tiny hairy legs moving across my chest. I focused on the many eyes looking back at me and froze with fear.

Raymond Tobaygo

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Good afternoon, Craig

I think you’ve touched on a distinct fear of finding a spider or spider-like creature staring at you from your chest.

Well done!

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

Tim Hillebrant

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Oz has the world’s deadliest snakes and spiders, jellyfish, crocs, and sharks. Are y’all taking immigrants?

Well done, Craig!

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