Writing Challenge #17

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WEEKLY CHALLENGE #17

  1. WRITE:  We’ve done opening line challenges before, but this one is a little bit different because the challenge is to write an opening line to start a story or poem for the $100 prize contests we have going on right now.

We’re hoping this will encourage you all to write and enter the contests! Also, we’re (for the first time ever!) opening the contests up to EVERYONE by offering a one month free upgrade.  So, if you’re not an upgraded member, head over to our upgrade page, select the $7.99 One Month option, and then put in the coupon code SIGNUPBONUS to upgrade your account for free. The coupon will bring the price of the account down to $0.00

Registration page is here: https://www.writerscarnival.ca/register/

Check out the current contests here: https://www.writerscarnival.ca/category/contests/

Check out everything your new upgraded account will get you here: https://www.writerscarnival.ca/free-one-month-upgrade/

2. COMMENT: You MUST comment on FOUR other entries to qualify. If you do not, your entry will be disqualified from the challenge. Give and take… Keep the cycle going.

3. IMPORTANT In order to qualify, you MUST vote for your TOP TWO choices. If you don’t vote, you cannot win this challenge (even if you receive the most votes!). To vote, you need to reply to the email that goes out for the Weekly Challenges. In that email, if you scroll to the bottom, you will see all the information you need to vote for this challenge.You must join our mailing list in order to receive the weekly voting email. 

4. DEADLINE: Tuesday, July 19th at 11:59 p.m. PST. Voting booth will open for this challenge on Wednesday, July  20th, and the winners will be announced the following Wednesday, July 27th.

CONGRATULATIONS: To the winners of Challenge #15… Michael Decker, Jay Heltzer and Claudine S.

THIS CHALLENGE IS OPEN TO ALL MEMBERS!

Have fun!

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Author Notes

179 Comments for “Writing Challenge #17”

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It was silent.

Marcia Yearwood

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“Great is your faithfulness, O God my Father,” she sang haltingly but wholeheartedly, with tears streaming down her face as she watched the huge crane hoist the 18 wheeler from the river.

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The clocks ticked loudly, their pendulums swinging as he dodged through the maze of clockwork mechanisms, each second amplifying each click like bullets in his brain.

Marcia Yearwood

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Wow, imagine clock works large enough for a person to run through! And the noise would be deafening! I can just picture this as a movie. Nice one Becky!

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It begins with a kind of Hitchcock feel to it with the clocks and the scene that unfolds. It is actually a dream the main character is having. I am glad it excited you a bit. 🙂 Thank you.

Raymond Tobaygo

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Good afternoon, Becky

Very interesting environment you’ve created for your character. Sound very dangerous.

Well done.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

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I think you have read this story, and commented that the ending was a bit abrupt. The story title is “Clockwork”. Trying to decide what to enter for the contest. Thank you. 🙂

charles stone

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Paula shook her head. “You not using no rubber that you kept
in your wallet. I know what happens to condoms that are kept in your
back pocket.”

Raymond Tobaygo

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Good afternoon, Charles

Hmmn, interesting situation. I wonder if he’ll get a new one, or try and convince her he doesn’t have to.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

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Nervous at the crossroads we meet
Tired bodies and scared feet

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Nerveous at he crossroads we meet
Tired bodies and scared feet.

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The beginning of this poem speaks as a journey to me. Both have traveled far and now meet. Really like this beginning line. 🙂

Write On!
Becky

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Rebecca you have summed it up so well. It is about the journey of race relations. We have jouneyed a long way now we are here. The story begins or continues here. Rebecca you are so insightful! Thank you so much!

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I find your writing insightful…it always intrigues me, and so often there is such a strong undercurrent of passion. You have an innate ability to send a message that speaks to people without judgement. This allows you to speak to our hearts. 🙂

Raymond Tobaygo

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Good afternoon, Carol

I wonder if there is a sinister motive (poison) regarding what’s in the meatloaf?

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

Raymond Tobaygo

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I had to return my Captain’s skull to the compound and though I knew they would try to kill me to prevent this, it was my only option if I wanted to avoid the brutal slaughter of what they referred to as ‘the innocents.’

Tim Hillebrant

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Yeah, that’s a first line that gets the attention centered. I want to know what happens next!

Tim

Raymond Tobaygo

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Good afternoon, Tim

Tahnk you for your input as it’s always appreciated. The sentence is the opening for a SS in the works.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

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Wow. Lots of intrigue and unknown objects and perhaps, ceremony, with this one. Peaks my curiosity a bit. Nice!

Write On!
Becky

Raymond Tobaygo

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Good morning, Becky

Thank you for the input as it’s always appreciated. I’m glad the sentence had the desired results.

take care and stay safe,

Ray

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A lot going on here! If I could make a suggestion, it would be to end the sentence at “to avoid brutal slaughter”. I think the addition of information concerning “the innocents” gives the piece an explanatory tone. Without it, I extract a nonchalant sort of humor from your main character, despite the severity of the situation he’s in. That’s a story I’d love to read!

Raymond Tobaygo

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Good afternoon, Annalie

thanks for the input as it’s appreciated. I did toy a bit ending the sentence where you suggested, but I couldn’t resist mentioning the ‘Innocents.’

The sentence is the opening line of a SS I’m working on.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

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Chapter 1 opening of my Christian Romance novel, WITH YOU FOREVER. May share this story in the site in the future.

Fourteen-year-old Eva Rose Conway entered Garden Ridge High School, hoping she wouldn’t vomit her breakfast cereal.

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LOL. Those first jitters of going to a new school, or just having to endure the first day of a new year. Sounds like a YA novel. Good one, Michaela. 🙂

Write On!
Becky

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Poor girl! Like I explained to Ray, I think this opener would be even more enhanced if you omitted some information from your sentence. For example, “fourteen year old” isn’t necessary information if you have the high school bit in there, especially because I’m sure you elaborate later on! Keep writing!

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Irina Owen zipped up her suitcase, envisioning the Arabian beaches.

Raymond Tobaygo

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Good afternoon, Patricia

I’m curious as to why Irina’s suitcase reminded her of the Arabian Beaches.

take care and stay safe,

Ray

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Though I’m hoping that Irina enjoys her vacation, I’m sure something outrageous will happen, considering that authors like to mess up their protagonists. Best of luck to her!

Raymond Tobaygo

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Good afternoon, Annalie

I’m curious to see what the authors might do to to keep Irina from enjoying her vacation. Well done.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

Marcia Yearwood

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Nice one! Really gets me to wondering, though. Is she really going on vacation (like other comments mention) or perhaps she is running away from something…

Tim Hillebrant

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“Everyone always said, ‘There’s no such thing as magic’. Boy, did they get that wrong!”

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It’s okay by me and I would like to read the rest of the story, however, does the contest require one line?

Tim Hillebrant

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The contest is a full short story or poem. This weekly challenge is just the opening line to your poem or story. 🙂

I hope you enter the contest, and wish you the best of luck if you do.

🙂

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I already like where this is going, considering I’m a fantasy sort of girl. Also, I enjoy the humorous tonal overlay. In other words, I can’t wait to read further! Good job, Tim.

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The rain fit my mood perfectly, as I stood by the grave looking at the headstone with my name on it.

Carol Moore

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“What’s in the meatloaf?”

Raymond Tobaygo

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Good afternoon, Carol

Your sentence has me wondering if there’s a sinister angle to the the question (poison in the meatloaf)?

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

Marcia Yearwood

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“Sorry can’t tell you what’s in the meatloaf cause it’s old family secret!” Nice one! Carol, you always come up with such interesting stories. Write on.

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