The Bike

 

The bike.


Author Notes

This is a response to a prompt. I want to expand it into a short story for a competition, I would like to know on this page, (not my blog ) if you think it is a strong enough opening. Any critique would be appreciated. Thank you in advance.

7 Comments for “The Bike”

charles stone

says:

What did you use invisible type? Hahaha.

says:

No Charles you touch the blue words In the post ‘ The Bike’ and it will transport you to my blog *waves*

charles stone

says:

Oh. *facepalm*

charles stone

says:

Hmm. Different. I had to read it three times to actually follow the action. It could be a morbid end or the beginning to a dashing thriller. I like it. Oh, for some odd reason the “Em” threw me for a loop. Maybe because it was coupled with the abrupt change of the scene. Write On.

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