Poison Flower

The nurse shoved the bundle into my arms and turned away, her steps long and brisk. “Everyone deserves a chance,” was what she announced as the door snapped her out of the room.

I stared after my nurse for a while, into the space I wished for her to continue to occupy. The blue of the walls became one with my mind, a slate of numbing reality. I felt the weight of the thing snuggled in between my elbows the way Happy would arrange herself when she was a pup. Happy was cute. Happy was innocent. This thing was neither.

A low cry sounded from within the folds of cotton. I bit my lip as the whine grew in length, and tried blocking it out with the use of the minute hand approaching ‘12’ as my metronome. The ticking of the clock resounded within my head, a steady heartbeat of an anchor, building in volume to a deafening toll. My eyes were closing, allowing the thumping of blood and time to overwhelm me in persistent, deadening waves. Then a little hand rose, grasping, breaking the surface of my escape. Trying to find someone. Trying to find me. And I looked down.

The baby on my chest was small, with full cheeks that blossomed with rose color. Blonde curls had already started twisting from her head, defying gravity the way they rose straight up like spiral staircases. Absentmindedly, I ran my fingers through them, letting loose a laugh when they bounced around like dainty little springs. She giggled with me, and it was the purest of sounds, like hand bells being rung by white-gloved angels. Her reaching hand found my face and she giggled when it came away wet. My blurred eyes searched hers, a wide and wondering brown that challenged the world for adventures. Eyes that were innocent.

The monster that siphoned her was nowhere to be found in her persona of softness, in the nuzzling of the pink blankets that tucked her away. I smiled. She was my daughter, not his. She was my daughter, and I loved her.

Clematis
Clematis

Author Notes

8 Comments for “Poison Flower”

reigny dai

says:

I love the comparison of her giggle to hand bells rung by white-gloved angels. That makes a strong statement and sticks with you.

says:

Wonderful writing here, Annalie! I wasn’t sure where this was heading at first, but you brought it around brilliantly. Well done! You did a great job building up the tempo. Best part – no nits.

Write on!

Tim Hillebrant

says:

Beautiful writing here, Annalie. I loved the descriptive way you took us through the emotions of a mother, coming to piece with the child who was not necessarily born of love. Makes for a perfect place for her healing to begin.

Well done!

Tim

RissRyker518

says:

Excellent piece, Annalie. Made me smile with happiness at her acceptance of a child born of violence. Just beautiful!

Raymond Tobaygo

says:

Good morning, Annalie

Very descriptive. You help the reader explore the mother’s range of emotions and observations. I can feel your desire to show the reader the various depths of your character.

Observations:

Happy was cute. Happy was innocent. This thing was neither. I’m confused…is the thing the baby? Towards the end of the story you give the opposite impression.

I bit my lip as the whine grew in length, and tried blocking it out with the use of the minute hand approaching ‘12’ as my metronome. Found this somewhat confusing.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

Marcia Yearwood

says:

Wow, just wow. I feel so much from this piece (love, courage, sympathy, wanting to hug them & take them home with me!) but I also have questions. It seems she was raped but did she also have an late term abortion where her daughter lived? My reasoning is because of what the nurse said “everybody deserves a chance” and also the line, “the monster that siphoned her” makes me think of an abortion machine. Awesome writing Annalie!

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