My hands fumbled around the
Kitchen table at two-thirty a.m, finally
Finding and grasping a sweaty
Beer bottle. I’ve
Got some questions for you
God, I barked into the
Darkness. I’ve prayed at the
Floor often enough, dropped
My ten percent into your tray.
You owe me.
Where did my dog run off to?
Why couldn’t you make my penis bigger?
When will the meek get theirs?
Why did the passenger pigeon die out?
Is this the best you can do?
I took a long swig of beer and
Waited.
Nothing.
At least the beer was still cold.
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Author Notes
This was a rough first draft of a poem that actually morphed into another work I posted here elsewhere here. I thought I'd revisit the original, see if I could smooth it out a little.
10 Comments for “Lord, I Have Questions (First Draft)”
reigny dai
says:This is fantastic. God’s got a lot of explaining to do. I love that you touched upon personal questions and questions the world would like answered. The sarcasm of at least having a cold beer brought it all together, but it also shows, no matter how small, we can find something for which to be thankful.
I enjoyed this piece to the fullest.
Dave Allen
says:Thank you, Reigny! This was a rough, rough draft. I appreciate the compliment!
Raymond Tobaygo
says:Good morning, Dave
Mea culpa. I don’t know why I said Craig. Again, me culpa.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Dave Allen
says:No problem, Ray – happens to me all the time!
Raymond Tobaygo
says:Good morning, Craig
Interesting conversation with God. The questions span the range of questions from the obvious to the succinct, from the general to the private. I liked how you injected the humor. Looking forward to the finished version.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Dave Allen
says:Thanks, Ray!
Carol Moore
says:That is funny Dave
Dave Allen
says:Thanks, Carol!
Craig Lincoln
says:A lot more going here than appears at first ,I feel that it could be interpreted in many ways well done
Dave Allen
says:Thanks, Craig!