A Small Stream

beneath dappled forest
tinkling sounds greet
gently flowing waters

beneath dappled trees
tinkling sounds
gentle flowing water


Author Notes

Here are two versions of a haiku I wrote about a very shady glade in the japanese gardens please let me know which sits better with you and why. If you are a haiku fan please advise on those aspects you find either lacking or more pronounced.

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